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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or reaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Although
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 involving voluntary works in school
curricular
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curricula
 is beneficial to the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 in certain extents, it does exert negative influences.
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, it is controversially argued whether
unpaid
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the unpaid community service
community
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service
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 should be included in the program or not. Not only does unpaid
community
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service
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 allow adolescents to acquire
soft skills but
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soft skills, but
 it
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 brings benefits to the neighbourhood.
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 of all, students are offered to gain practical knowledge from helping people out. Working at institutions
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 as nursing home,
for instance
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, help them learn how to get along well with elderly people.
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 to that, by taking part in cleaning the streets, teenagers could acknowledge what street workers may suffer,
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 avoid littering.
Secondly
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, workload of people in the vicinity could be lesson due to students’ help.
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, they may feel happier and work more effectively.
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, it is supposed that voluntary works may lead to consequences that affect students badly. Partaking in
community
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service
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 requires
teenagers both
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teenagers, both
 time and physical health.
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, they may find it difficult to balance between their study and voluntary works.
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, since adolescents are inexperienced in works
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 as teaching children or taking care of the elder, hardly could they not make any mistakes.
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, they could become a burden of the work
instead
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 of being helpful. In conclusion, despite the fact that joining unpaid
community
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service
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 is advantageous to both students and the locality, it may result in negative effects.
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, students should strike a balance so as to both study well and being helpful to the
community
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.

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