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Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these exa

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In recent years, there have been lots of discussions about whether scientists should conduct
research
 that benefits the majority of people. While I agree with
this
 statement, I believe that other purposes should be taken into consideration. It is true that there are many good results coming from
research
 areas that benefit humankind. Indeed, projects funded by the government or industry have
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 improved not only our standard of
living but
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living, but
also
 the efficiency and effectiveness of
work
Suggestion
the work
 done. The invention of vaccines,
for example
, by Doctor Pasteur has helped millions of people develop protection from deathly diseases,
thus
 reducing
death rate
Suggestion
death rates
the death rate
 and increasing life expectancy.
Moreover
, by gaining the public's
favor
promote over another
favour
, their projects will attract more governmental or private investment. One of the best ways to apply for financial support is probably through gaining public recognition and satisfying the need of the mass. Since many studies require years of
research
 and an enormous amount of capital, it is important to seek and obtain funding at an early stage of the process. Having said that, scientists should not be restricted in any field of study by public opinion.
In other words
, they should be allowed to engage in experiments in their best interest and provided opportunities to do what they are good at, considering the main purpose of science being encouraging creativity and curiosity. Many life-changing
inventions particularly
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inventions, particularly
 microwaves or dynamites were discovered by a spontaneous idea or a moment when their intention was not to serve the interest of people.
Such
 innovations could be beneficial or harmful to people, but it is undeniable that they have made a major contribution to society’s development. In conclusion,
although
 the main aim of
research
 should be beneficial for all mankind, researchers should not be limited regardless of their outcomes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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