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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures should be taken to solve the problems?

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Nowdays
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Nowadays
 the world wide more concern about the
environment
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 pollution
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 how we can solve it
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 One of the main
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sources
 of pollution which is
plastic
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 the cars
smoks
a cloud of fine particles suspended in a gas
smokes
smocks
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Plastic
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 is a huge problem for our
environment
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 We are going to talk deeply about
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 of all, no one can live without
plastic
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The
 most of our items and tools made from
plastic
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, all the industries now uses the
plastic
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 on so many things
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 like home items
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 kitchen tools
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 our cell phones everything
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 On the other part of it, there is
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
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plastic
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 which is not
disposible
free or available for use or disposition
disposable
 material.
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So
 its not easy disposal it, most of companies or factories they just throw it
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in
 the sea or ocean
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 which will kill all of our sea life
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 like a fish
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 will affect the
environment
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 How to solve
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 issue
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 we can solve it by encouraging our social habits
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 through the government should be so tough with the companies with a lot of fines if they cross the rules. Main solve on
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 part is recycling the
plastic
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 we have to be careful of our world its for our future and our children as well
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 By stop using
plastic
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 and struggling with it to clean our sea and clean the
environment
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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