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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three kind of nutrients included in common meals in the USA. These nutrients might be harmful when eaten pretty often.

The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three kind of nutrients included in common meals in the USA. These nutrients might be harmful when eaten pretty often.
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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three
kind
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 of
nutrients
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 included in common meals in the USA. These
nutrients
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 might be harmful when eaten pretty often.
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, the greatest proportion of
nutrients
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 are eaten during dinner, it includes,
sodium
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, saturated fat and
sugar
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.
Whereas
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 for breakfast
people
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 eat the lowest percentages of
nutrients
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. The highest percentage of
sugar
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 is presented in snacks. During dinner,
people
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 eat 43% of
sodium
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 which is the largest fraction eaten compared with the other
nutrients
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.
This
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 figure is followed by the saturated fat that accounted for 37% of the nutrient consumed
in
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at
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 dinner.
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, during the lunch meal,
people
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 eat 29% of
sodium
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 and 26% of saturated fat.
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, when it comes to
people
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 eating snacks, almost half of the
nutrients
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 eaten are added
sugar
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 and only 14% of
sodium
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. For breakfast,
people
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 eat the lowest fraction of
nutrients
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overall
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, they only eat 14% of
sodium
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, and the same amount of saturated fat and added
sugar
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 with 16%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, sodium, sugar, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • nutrients
  • common meals
  • harmful
  • frequently
  • overview
  • comparison
  • prevalent
  • potential health risks
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • tooth decay
  • sodium content
  • high blood pressure
  • kidney issues
  • healthier meal options
  • modifications
  • public health implications
  • dietary habits
  • consumption
  • excessive
  • analysis
  • inspection
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