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Some people think that economic development is the only way to end poverty while others believe that it is causing damage to the environment and so should be stopped. Disscuss both views and give your opinion

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Whether nations should keep economic
development
 is
matter
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a matter
 of
controversial
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controversy
. Some people reckon that investment in
economy
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the economy
an economy
 is the way to
dealth
the event of dying or departure from life
death
dealt
 with problems related to poverty while others hold up to the idea that economic
development
 is
culprit
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a culprit
 of
enviromental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
 damage. My essay is going to discuss about both sides and put forward
to
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in
 my personal view. Admittedly, only thanks to disbursement in
economy
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the economy
do nations
a voluntary gift (as of money or service or ideas) made to some worthwhile cause
donations
 address poverty issues. Stable growth creates a lot of job opportunities for people, followed by a high proportion of employment.
Vitenam
a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945
Vietnam
 is a case
of
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in
 point. No sooner
dis
mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'
does
did
is
this
country
 focus on economic
development
 in 1986 than the rate of unemployment decreased stunningly by 80% in
next five years
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the next five years
 in nationwide. But for their job, people have more income to pay fees in their family. Not only does investing
economy
 help people have a full
life but
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life, but
 enlarging domestic market to foreign
country
also
enrichs
make better or improve in quality
enriches
enrich
businessmans
the body of individuals who manage businesses
businessmen
 in Vietnam. Economic
development
 is background to improve
educatin
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 and heath care service. Due to higher remuneration, parents
wants
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want
 to build good studying
environment
 for their children.
Besides
, more and more
hopitals
a health facility where patients receive treatment
hospitals
 are constructed with modern equipments and better service, which helps people cure dangerous diseases and enhance
longervity
duration of service
longevity
. Statistics have stated that
Japan which
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Japan, which
 has economic
development
, has the oldest average age
in
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of
 the world.
Nevertheless
,
development
os
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OS
os'
economy
 exerts deleterious effects on our
environment
. A soar of factories and
expandtion
the act of increasing (something) in size or volume or quantity or scope
expansion
 of corporations is the cause of pollution. Let take China is a living example. Surveys have shown that China is the
second
country
 of economic
development
.
However
,
this
country
 is appreciated the most polluted in the world. Air quality index in
China especially
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China, especially
 metropolitan hotels
always exceed
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always exceeds
safe level
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safe levels
a safe level
. By dint of huge expenditure on
economy
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the economy
 and profits, a large number of
interprises
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
enterprises
 ignore to build waste treatment system before discharging into the
environment
. As a consequence, water
environment
 is polluted, leading to the death of animals. All things considered, notwithstanding coping with poverty and improving education
and medical, economic
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, medical, and economic
 growth has devastating impacts on our
environment
.
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