some people think that secondery school children should study international news as one of the school subject. give reasons for your answer and includ any relevent example from your own knowledge

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Nowadays, thanks to the development technology, the importance of international Media increase more and more.
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why some individuals call to introduce it in the secondary school program. Personally, I think that it is not
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a wise idea not just for the negative impact on our children but
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on the society. In
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essay I will say why those people are wrong and why.
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,
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of pedagogical programs, channel news doesn’t care about the quality of their diffusions.
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because it’s totally commercial, there are no experts to control if the transmissions respond to some conditions, at least, if it there is any aim or something to learn from. Many studies showed that the lack of pedagogical methods led to the failure of the processes of education.
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why it’s so important to avoid
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kind of subject in college.
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, international news could have a negative impact on our children, because at
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age, they don’t have the necessary hindsight, the
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certain influence would be on their behaviour which can be damaged because of the violence from a live war reported by different channel all over the world like EL DJAZIZA NEWS, BBC or CNN FOX. Another one is the psychological effect
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as the constant feeling of fairness and
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caused by the flux of bloody pictures, bombardments and other acts of cannibalism.
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Moreover children
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the world unjust and nothing worth living. Currently, International Media don’t reply to the educational rules. Unless the reviewing of their program according to scholastic directions and removing of all the scenes of violence, universal news remains a real danger for our kids and the whole society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global awareness, fostering, interconnectedness, critical thinking, analyzing, bias, complexities, proficiency, debates, articulate, empathy, cultural sensitivity, diverse cultures, global citizenship, globalized world, interconnected, economic, political, social landscape, informed, responsible, global issues
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