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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Global warming is hotly debated topic nowadays across the world.
Although
 many might disagree with the statement, I completely agree with
this
 notion, not only because of pollution caused by burning fuels in car engines and rapid urbanization but
also
 because of
deforestation
.
This
 essay will explore how these factors justify my opinion.
Firstly
, the
factor
 that compelled me to agree with
this
 statement is the pollution caused by car engines.As the burning of fossil fuels in vehicles used for transportation, can result in
damage
 of the ozone layer which will lead to rise in earth temperature.Take the example of China
,
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,
where extreme pollution is seen
as a result
 of enhanced transports on roads which has adversely affected the local weather.
Thus
,
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,
growth in transport on roads is one of the leading
factor
Suggestion
factors
 for causing global warming.
Secondly
, fast urbanization has resulted in consumption of local resources and
damage
 to natural ecosystems.As shifting to urban areas has tremendously put pressure on natural resources and has caused
damage
 to the natural environment.
For instance
,
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,
rapid expansion of Washington, DC in the USA has led to polluted local atmosphere and
damage
 to natural habitats.
Hence
, rapid shifting to city areas has proved to be one of the important
factor
 in global warming.
Finally
,
deforestation
 is another key
factor
 in causing global warming.As forests keep balance of various gases mandatory for living creatures so in case of
deforestation
, the earth temperature start rising leading to global warming. To sum up
,
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,
I believe that I completely agree with
this
 statement not only because of fuel consumption by engines and urbanization but
also
 because of
deforestation
.
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