In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

An extremely harsh problem nowadays many countries are facing is to deal with the criminal rate increasing astonishingly and becoming more severe. From my view, there are several probable reasons for
this
issue
such
as the population booming and the lack of education.
Thus
, I am going to explain these two reasons and support some correspondent solutions to solve
this
issue.
To begin
with the matter of the overcrowd,
this
tends to happen in developing and poor countries where they seemingly do not care about the population.
In other words
, they keep bearing more and more children without any awareness of poverty and the conditions how to nurture these generations. Lacking of occupation and hunger come to be the obvious consequences.
Hence
, these people have to convict criminals for their livelihood and yet, the poorer they are, the more violent they commit.
Secondly
, being uneducated could be considered as the other reason for
this
.
For example
, in some Latin-American countries,
such
as Mexico or Peru, these nations have a significant proportion of crime and most of them have to work since they were very young. If no one teach them about the law and how to avoid committing crimes,
then
burglary, petty pickpockets, or murders would happen radically in these societies.
Therefore
, in order to fix
this
matter, the parliaments, governors or leaders of those regions could pass the new law which is likely to deter them than building more prisons as jails are the mix of criminals and criminals, in fact,
this
would increase the criminal rate
instead
. If those who broke the law have another change to adjust their mistakes. Netherland,
for instance
, is a happy country in which the level of social security is much higher than the others nearby. I am convinced that
this
could dwindle the escalating of the level of crime.
Finally
, I would like to conclude that even though
this
is the inevitable issue for each country, I am convinced that implementing methods of keeping issuing updated laws, abolishing the outdated ones, giving those sinners another chance to start over could be done to utterly solve
this
problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • violent crimes
  • socioeconomic factors
  • law enforcement
  • technology
  • education
  • employment
  • drug abuse
  • alcohol abuse
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • effectiveness
  • investing
  • job creation
  • social support
  • community engagement
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