In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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An extremely harsh problem nowadays many countries are facing is to deal with the criminal rate increasing astonishingly and becoming more severe. From my view, there are several probable reasons for

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as the population booming and the lack of education.

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, I am going to explain these two reasons and support some correspondent solutions to solve

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with the matter of the overcrowd,

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tends to happen in developing and poor countries where they seemingly do not care about the population.

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, they keep bearing more and more children without any awareness of poverty and the conditions how to nurture these generations. Lacking of occupation and hunger come to be the obvious consequences.

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, these people have to convict criminals for their livelihood and yet, the poorer they are, the more violent they commit.

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, being uneducated could be considered as the other reason for

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, in some Latin-American countries,

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as Mexico or Peru, these nations have a significant proportion of crime and most of them have to work since they were very young. If no one teach them about the law and how to avoid committing crimes,

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burglary, petty pickpockets, or murders would happen radically in these societies.

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, in order to fix

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matter, the parliaments, governors or leaders of those regions could pass the new law which is likely to deter them than building more prisons as jails are the mix of criminals and criminals, in fact,

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would increase the criminal rate

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. If those who broke the law have another change to adjust their mistakes. Netherland,

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, is a happy country in which the level of social security is much higher than the others nearby. I am convinced that

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could dwindle the escalating of the level of crime.

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, I would like to conclude that even though

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is the inevitable issue for each country, I am convinced that implementing methods of keeping issuing updated laws, abolishing the outdated ones, giving those sinners another chance to start over could be done to utterly solve

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problem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.5

Complete response

8.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

355 words

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crime rate
violent crimes
socioeconomic factors
law enforcement
technology
education
employment
drug abuse
alcohol abuse
poverty
inequality
effectiveness
investing
job creation
social support
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In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The only way to improve safety in our roads is to give stricter punishment for driving offenses. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

An overseas friend has invited you to visit his country. You are planning to visit him. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter  Thank him for the invitation and accept the invitation  Write details about your visit  Briefly describe what you want to do there.