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Band 6.5

You recently ordered some books online. However, you have not received them as yet. This has created a lot of inconvenience for you, especially as you are doing some research for which you need the books immediately. Write a letter to the authority in-charge to convey your dissatisfaction about the delay. In the letter, ● describe the situation ● explain why you are dissatisfied ● say what you want him/her to do

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are well. I would like to write
this
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 letter to show my dissatisfaction with your delivery of my recent purchase, which is a historical
book
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Nextly
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, I have an interview
this
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 week for the position of cultural manager, and I need to do some research and gather information from papers and articles. Moving
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, the
book
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 I ordered covers all the requirements for my interview and excludes the external findings from books and newspapers.
Furthermore
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, I ordered
this
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book
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 3 weeks ago;
although
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 the delivery date was almost one week ago, I still haven't received my parcel.
That is
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 very frustrating;
additionally
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, I never expected
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 negligence from your company.
Last
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 but not least, I don't need
this
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book
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 because I already did my extra work
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 the delay in delivery, so please cancel my parcel and refund my money. I trust that you will address
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 matter promptly. Thank you for your attention. Warm regards, Manpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea that connects to the topic. Try to separate your points into clear paragraphs.
task achievement
You can improve your tone by using more polite language, especially when asking for action.
task achievement
You clearly describe your problem and explain why it is important to you.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is polite overall and uses a formal greeting and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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