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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is better environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages

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The shipping of a wide range of foods from other cities or countries may have an adverse impact on locally produced
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 more merits than demerits. On the face of it, the consumption of local
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 might be said to have certain drawbacks. One of them is the lack of diversity or exotic taste. Without access to strange
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 from far away, people in Vietnam today,
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, would feel fed up with a limited number of
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 choices or would never have a chance to try, and probably enjoy, the taste of a similar type of
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 which is actually imported from other countries,
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 as Kobe beef from Japan.
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, compared with
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 transported from other regions, eating
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 produced locally is significantly more beneficial in economic, environmental, and educational terms. From an economic point of view, local
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 does not involve excessive transportation leading to higher and higher costs, especially with increasing fuel prices taken into account.
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 associated with less damaging effects on the environment related to the shipping of
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 products by plane from abroad. In terms of education, consuming local
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 helps nurture patriotism among young generations, orienting them towards preserving and developing the sense of using indigenous products. In today's world of globalization, the effort to consume local
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 playing an indispensable role in maintaining the identity of each and every local culture. In a word, the downside of eating locally produced
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 is outweighed by its upside.
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 is, in actual fact, true from economic, environmental, and educational viewpoints.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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