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People's shopping habits depends more on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these days and
age
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, Shopping has become one of pivotal importance for every individual. Some people relate all these factors to
age
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 difference as each person have different habit and style of buying outfits. I agree with the essay notion that ages play a vital role in making
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selection for shopping but there are
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 certain factors among them which will I
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 of all, there are
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group of people having
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same
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 will tend to buy
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the
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certain thing that will suit them to use. Old people will surely go for simple things that are not much
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their
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. Youngsters will opt to buy technological series of gadgets to watch movies and download games.
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, kids will go for toys,
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cycles and barbie dolls. Famous brands have introduced many items for every person
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use related to
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. There are some other factors quite play an important role in shopping selection. Like if a person choice is non-identical relating to his
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 he will pick objects of his nature that will influence him. As nowadays generation is much aware of technology and a lot of stuff is available online which will grom their selection. They will incline more towards modern stuff that shows accordance towards
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 era and
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. More people are aware of modern industry. In conclusion, categorizing customers based on their life is an effective way to investigate their shopping habits. How ever, there are
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numbers of factors that could create the same impact on spending habits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • digital natives
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • target demographic
  • disposable income
  • consumer behavior
  • market segmentation
  • purchasing power
  • retail therapy
  • brand loyalty
  • impulse buying
  • price-sensitive
  • cross-generational
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