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Some people think that public health within a country can be improved by government making laws regarding nutritious food. Others, however, think that health is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #health #country #government #laws #food #matter #choice #responsibility
Globalisation and Industrialization
has
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have
 impacted working and eating habits of almost everyone residing in Tier 1 or Tier 2 cities.
Fast
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Fast-food
food
 chains and QSR restaurants have emerged as a go-to place for people in corporate jobs due to high workload. Public
health
 in general
,
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apply
depends majorly on these two factors.
This
 essay will discuss both aspects of government intervention in regulating
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the
availability of different eating options in order to improve general
health
 in the country.
Although
 eating habits are unique in every region, religion and even generation, there is one similarity, which is
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the
need of nutrition for our body to maintain
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the
immune system and ability to perform the required tasks. Depending
of
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on
 various job types, different diet patterns are more appropriate for different people, and
accordingly
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,
 humans have developed their eating habits around it.
This
 directly affects the
health
 which, albeit gradually, improves overtime if we consume nutritious
food
; and remain physically active throughout the day. I strongly advocate that maintaining overall
health
 should be the responsibility of oneself in general.
However
, authorities should ensure that private companies are not overburdening their employees to perform more than what their job entails. Regulating nutritious
food
 entirely may result in favouritism and undue inclination towards one industry, hampering the level playing field for various businesses. Partial involvement of government in releasing the minimum nutritional requirement for people, enabling transparency on the ingredients used in
food
 items being sold in outlets or supermarkets, guidance on leading a healthy lifestyle will always ascertain the good of their citizens.
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