One good way to promote world peace is through international sporting events. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Sports are no doubt a great source of joy and reliance. some people claim that
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it can be used to spread the message of harmony around the globe. I absolutely concur with the argument because in my opinion, holding and playing sports in
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bring
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brings
them together and mitigate negative thoughts among them.
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events are arranged on the global scale it gives people a chance to mix with other people. They usually don't think about their own country or territory but
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they are more into
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For instance
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one another and mostly during sports
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they come close to each other, share ideas, which broaden their horizon and feel love for people of others country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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