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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As the
gender
 is taken consideration into the admission of universities, though
the
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they
 propose that
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a
the
number of female students every speciality admits should be equal to male students is unrealistic, I still believe that it is advantageous because it can break stereotypes and resolve problems caused by the
gender
 imbalance. From a short-term view, the measure for college to accept equal numbers of different genders is not reasonable.
That is
 because the standard for
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the
a
university to choose students is their academic achievements. In certain subjects which two genders had been disproportional for decades of years, being equal is unfair.
For example
, in China, a university announced in 2019 that they would admit the same numbers of male and female masters on English Teaching, which is mostly favoured by girls.
Consequently
, female students have to perform enormously better than the male counterpart.
However
, from a long-term perspective, equating the
quantity
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number
 of female students with male students could overcome stereotypes. Due to the fixed imagination of subject choices for both genders, a lot of areas suffer from
the
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gender
 imbalance.
As a result
, the power disparity had become rather severe, which could result in
gender
 discrimination including sexual harassment in workplaces. Being equal can compensate
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for
 the disparity.
For example
, according to a survey by Smith College, among different state police departments in American, rape cases are less likely to commit in those states where boast higher rates of female police officers. To summarize, from my perspective,
although
 equating the numbers of male and female students seems to be not realistic because historical
gender
 imbalance, improving the equality between the number of two genders is more advantageous by breaking stereotypes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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