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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your opinion.

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While some people believe
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 using
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 brings positive result whereas others believe in
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egative outcome of it. In my point of view, the positive consequences of it outweigh the negative trend.
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, the statement has dual aspects which will be discussed in the below paragraphs. On the one hand, way of
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 has been changed since the spread of
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 and internet all over the world as people now can easily access anything which they wish to learn
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 of attending any
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 institution physically.
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, Online degrees are now easily accessible and becoming very popular. Anyone residing in any remote village of Kerala can access to Harvard University graduate programme.
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, it is very apparent that
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omputer has reduced many barriers like cost, distance in
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.
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, there are few unsatisfactory impacts it brings can not be overlooked.
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, distant learning programmes have drawbacks to teach the way of spontaneous communications, customs of the institutions and to build a strong network which can be useful after graduation.
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, a person who accessed the Harvard graduation programme from the distant place may get the degree after passing examinations but will definitely lack in communications and networking which may hamper his career.
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, some field of study does not require
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igorous skill of communication. To summarize, we may say that every blessing of the world has both positive and negative side and
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 technology is nothing different
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 that law.
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, by seeing the phenomenal usage of the
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 we should not stop using it in
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 but we should research continuously to eradicate the weaknesses it has.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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