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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is being believed that it is been prevented the individuals from social gathering because people are spending lots of
time
 watching
TV
. I totally agree with
this
 statement, we will discuss it
furthermore
 in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, in early days
TV
 was only electronic entertainment source for most of the population, from kids to old age everyone seems busy and indulge in it.
For example
, I can still remember those days, when a particular cartoon series was played on
TV
, exactly after my private tuitions and I use to watch it for an hour
instead
 of playing any sports outside. Later on, my parents push me to sports like badminton and cricket. Since I was in a small town and
TV
 was not that much famous so I gradually changed my habit but unfortunately, I always watch television closely, so it weakens my eyes as well.
On the other hand
, in
this
 modern era,
TV
 is hardly being watched now, as Smartphone took place and people became lazier than before. It not only takes precious
time
, but our physical and mental health gets affected a lot. Parents should keep an eye and set a
time
 limit for offspring t watch
TV
, study and play outdoors.
This
 will teach them discipline and
time
 management; those are helpful in professional life as well. To conclude, yes it is true, that television takes lots of
time
, which can spend on sports, study or other valuable stuff and as you grow, the socializing seems important to you.
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