Some people think that public health of a country can be improved if the government make laws regarding nutritious food but others think that it is the matter of personal choice and personal responsibility.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, most of
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eople always concern about health which is the most important aspect of our life.
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ome people believe that having
a laws
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in nutritious
food
by the government is the best ways for keeping public health.
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owever, others think that it is the duty of our personal responsibility and option.
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his essay will provide both sides of
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statement. Begin with, the reason why
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overnment should create laws about
nurtritious
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nutritious
food
is people will have
food
that
benefit
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for themselves.
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his can increase the number of good health in our society.
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oreover, it can reduce the amount of obesity that
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from unhealthy
food
such
as sugar.
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or example, in japan have a restriction that coke should be in term of low sugar that
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people
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o not have a chance for drinking full sugar.
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hen their citizen
have
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a healthy body.
On the other hand
, people should have an
oppotunity
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opportunity
of
chosing
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choosing
their
food
.
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his is because people have
a different
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a different life style
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life styles
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and we do not know
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what they dislike or enjoy
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that
food
.
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herefore it is the ability for
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itizen to opt
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their nutritious
food
.
For instance
, I always eat
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healthy food
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food
that I
intersted
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interested
on because I noticed that
this
is my soul and I should keep it fit. In conclusion, government laws and personal responsibility have an advantage in
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different ways.
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Government
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can help for
stricking
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striking
sticking
about types for foods.
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hile personal
responsiblity
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responsibility
provide people to select their own
food
.
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