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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You visited local beach and found out that there is a rubbish problem. In your letter: Describe the problem How it affects people on the beach Suggest what you want to do about them

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing concerning Palma
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beach
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Beach
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, where I have recently been
to
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. The issue is that the
beach
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 is full of litter that people have left after spending a holiday on it. In fact, it is almost impossible to find a free sport without bumping
on
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 a glass of broken bottles, beer cans, wrappings, and watermelon peels, etc. It is understood that it is not only an
ecology
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 problem but
also
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 unsanitary conditions.
As well as
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 children may harm themselves stepping on the broken glass. I strongly suggest you tackle
this
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 problem as soon as possible.
First,
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it is recommended to send a cleaning team to the
beach
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 and remove all the trash.
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, the administration might
give
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 an announcement for those who want to volunteer and help with picking up trash. The second measure will be introducing a fine for dumping waste on the
beach
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 and providing a sufficient
amount
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 of garbage bins. I hope you will address my complaint at the earliest opportunity. Sincerely yours, Mariya

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structure
Put one idea in each part of the letter.
content
Say what you want and when you want it done.
vocabulary
Use short, direct lines. Use plain words.
grammar
Check for small mistakes in grammar and spelling.
tone
The tone is polite and formal.
content
The problem and its harm are clear.
structure
The plan to fix it is clear.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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