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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult,such as the sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Nowadays, a majority of the travellers are choosing their holiday destination where the climate is extremely cold or hot to survive at that temperature level.
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his essay discusses the factors considering the merits and demerits of these kinds of journey.
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 with, there are certainly potential advantages in going for a highly risky place is to gain
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unique experience throughout the trip.
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hese locations visited by the tourists feel the thrilling experience every time they made a trip to the same place.
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or instance, he Sahara desert in India, ave a safari ride included in the package makes people scare a lot during the whole ride and encourages them to revisit.
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urthermore, there is less crowd in these life-threatening regions, where people can enjoy solitude and enjoy a lot without any disturbances from others.
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, the drawbacks involved in opting these places is the safety concern about the family members. Many people travel to the holiday destination with their kids and they may get unwell by the different atmosphere in these places. o illustrate, the Antarctica region is covered by ice and the temperature always goes in negative which the little ones are more prone to get cold and fever.
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esides, the high-risk takers who are attracted by these locations often caught with accidents due to their eagerness to try something new in their life. In conclusion, there are lots of advantages like gaining
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completely new experience and to enjoy alone with not many people around them.
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owever, safety issues about the family accompanied by them and their own well-being should not be overlooked.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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