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Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent days, the Internet is becoming more and more central to our lives. The rise of social media has sparked a debate about its influence on people's lives. While I agree that social media has brought a variety of benefits, I believe that its wide use inevitably has been associated with negative impacts on social interaction. On the one hand, social networks undeniably bring enormous merits to our life.
Firstly
, these media platforms help nurture and expand relationships. Social communication has provided us with the opportunity to connect with people and build better relationships with whom we are unable to meet personally.
Moreover
, Facebook, Twitter and countless other social networking sites
also
 give people the chance to make new friends by finding others who share the same interests and concerns.
Secondly
, The internet and social media can boost productivity. These tools offer more information including real-time news than a library full of obsolete ideas , and the information is accessible at any time of day or night. Studies have linked social media use with greater success in academics as well as job performance.
On the other hand
, the attribute that makes social media a positive force in our lives make it potentially dangerous.
For example
, anonymity allows for cyberbullying.
This
 is especially problematic for teenagers, as bullies can target and prey on vulnerable high school peers without taking personal responsibility. The
second
 disadvantage is that social media brings us isolation. Extreme usage of social media has reduced the level of human interaction. Because of social networks,the interaction with other people has become effortless and people have isolated their lives behind their online identities. In conclusion,
although
 there are some undeniable benefits of the popularity of social media, I
also
 believe that it has some negative impacts on our life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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