Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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, the question of whether the
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pays some of or all of the cost has
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receiving a great deal of public attention .
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trend is not without advantages , the downsides would be more
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significant
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sponsorship
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,
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since
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government
strengthen
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labor
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force , they will create many
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qualified
employees , which helps
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ation boost work productivity .
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, By investing money for study , they have
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supported
low – income family with children.
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mean
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that all student have the opportunity to study and
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cultivate
knowledge when their families can not afford it ,which gives students the opportunity to raise their families and to contribute to
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economy .
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drawbacks to
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sponorship
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sponsorship
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, in order to sponsor
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trend ,
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can put more burden on
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nation
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budget .
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mean
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that
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the
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should fund properly for many key areas,
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as healthcare, economy, education, which
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implied
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that every
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citizen
should shoulder the responsibility of paying for their children’ schooling fees.
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, if the
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support children ‘s education ,
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trend will unfair
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people without children .
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, they may feel angry or
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irritated
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their
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income is not spent on their
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benefit
benefits
, which make them feel unfair. In conclusion , the disadvantages will be far more significant than
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advantages . By investing
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the main fields, the
government
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can make the situation better .
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