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Children’s education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

#children’s #education #countries #government #costs
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Nowadays, the question of whether the state pays some of or all of the cost has been receiving a great deal of public attention .
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 labour force , they will create many qualified employees , which helps national boost work productivity .
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 , By investing money for study , they have supported low – income family with children.
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 means that all student have the opportunity to study and cultivate knowledge when their families can not afford it ,which gives students the opportunity to raise their families and to contribute to
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the government should fund properly for many key areas,
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 as healthcare, economy, education, which implied that every citizen should shoulder the responsibility of paying for their children’ schooling fees.
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 , if the state supports children ‘s education ,
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, they may feel angry or irritated when they have known their taxable income is not spent on their benefit , which makes them feel unfair. d In conclusion , the disadvantages will be far more significant than do advantages . By investing
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power can make the situation better .
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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