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Now the machine is very complex, a lot of difficult work to be automated. Machine automation development pros and cons?

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Due to the advancement of technology a lot of
work
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 is being completed efficiently and productively. Using new technologies individual can able to produce more while putting less effort.
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 essay will discuss about the merits and demerits of the new machines which are helping humans in their daily life. Nowadays, there are so many manual
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 is being completed using automatic machines. These machines,
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, being build by obseerving individuals what they are doing to comtplete their daily
work
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.
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: - In a sugarcane industry people
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, washing and clean sugarcane,
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, they squwash it,
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 they boil it and
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, they process it to get sugar out of it,
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, multiple machines can be integrated with an
automation
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 of all these things which we keep on running 24 by 7 to produce more sugar in less number of time.
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 training of machines is called as
automation
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, and using
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automation
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 many
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 in the industry can be completed with less human intervention and at the end it benefits to all. The major risk that occurs because of these automated tools is people loose their jobs because their intensive labour
work
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 is being replaced by the machines. These industrialist, in order to earn more, they replace humans with machines and produce more material which in return only provide benefits to the employers, whereas, the labour class people struggle to get their bread and butter. As per the research by the intelligence agencies, 40% of people had lost their due to autmation. To conclude,
automation
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 helps us to increase our daily productivity and
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 is being achieved by simulating human behaviour at
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 and
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 these machineries being trained and automated. Individual should be given priority at
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 and some law should be made so that people should not loose their jobs because of
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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