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Now the machine is very complex, a lot of difficult work to be automated. Machine automation development pros and cons?

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Due to the advancement of technology a lot of
work
 is being completed efficiently and productively. Using new technologies individual can able to produce more while putting less effort.
This
 essay will discuss about the merits and demerits of the new machines which are helping humans in their d123aily life. Nowadays, there are so many manual
work
 is being comopleted using automatic machines. These machines,
however
, being build by oboserving individuals what they are doing to complete their daily
work
.
For Example
: - In a sugarcane industry people
firstly
, washing and clean sugarcane,
secondly
, they squash it,
then
 they boil it and
finally
, they process it to get sugar out of it,
similarly
, multiple machines can be integrated with an
automation
 of all these things which we keep on running 24 by 7 to produce more sugar in less number of time.
This
 training of machines is called as
automation
, and using
this
automation
 many
work
 in the industry can be completed with less human intervention and at the end it benefits to all. The major risk that occurs because of these automated tools is people loose their jobs because their intensive labour
work
 is being replaced by the machines. These industrialist, in order to earn more, they replace humans with machines and produce more material which in return only provide benefits to the employers, whereas, the labour class people struggle to get their bread and butter. As per the research by the intelligence agencies, 40% of people had lost their due to autmation. To conclude,
automation
 helps us to increase our daily productivity and
this
 is being achieved by simulating human behaviour at
work
 and
accordingly
 these machineries being trained and automated. Individual should be given priority at
work
 and some law should be made so that people should not loose their jobs because of
automation
.
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