The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

Nowadays, we are facing

the

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rising

population

all over the world.

However

, I think there

have

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another more important issue that we need to concern about it. In

this

essay, I will discuss the reason why the

population

is

countinuing

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continuing

and why I disagree

that is

the

most

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greatest

problem

that we are facing. In the wake of technology

advantcing

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advancing

that make our health care system more optimization.

This

is

the

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one of the

reason

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to increase the

population

because

of

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our lifespan is extended by the optimize health care.

For example

, some people can be treated by medicine, especial people with

c

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hronic illness which is cannot

treated

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completely in the past.

Additionally

, people tend to

having

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many children in some

under developed

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countries.

This

also

make

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the increasing

population

issue.

Nevertheless

, the growth of the

population

in the world is the big

problem

, while there

have

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another more enormous

problem

that

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facing by

h

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uman,

such

the climate change. It has an

impect

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impact

on our earth because of the temperature rising, it

cause

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the glacier melt and the sea level grow up.

As a result

, our lands are becoming less to live.

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,

the

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goble

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global

warming

is

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also

threaten our life,

such

as it become hotter

then

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before. It is said that there have some people died due to the

heat wave

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every year. In conclusion,

although

the increasing

population

is a large

problem

,

but

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I strongly believe that there have other most important

issue

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that we need to concern, like

the

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climate change. It makes our planet less inhabitable place to live and the

goble

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global

warming makes our earth becoming not suitable to live because

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the temperature higher than before.