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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is thought by some people that capital
punishment
 should not be used. But
on the contrary
, some people
also
 think that capital
punishment
 should be used for severe crimes like a sexual violation, assassination, sexual slavery, forced labour and so on because these crimes are said to be against humanity.
To begin
 with, capital
punishment
 means to sentence a
person
 to
death
 by the law.
For instance
, a
person
 committed murder and when charged to court, the judge sentenced the
person
 to
death
 by hanging or electrocution. Truly, some people are against capital
punishment
 because they feel that no one has the night to sentence another
person
 to
death
.
However
, some people believe that
death
 should still serve as a
punishment
 for serious crimes.
For example
, people that commit murder, rape and human trafficking are mostly sentenced, stoned or electrocuted to
death
 because they are believed to have committed a crime against humanity.
Also
, some of
this people
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this person
these people
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 that think capital
punishment
 should be used sometimes take laws into their hands.
For instance
, it is generally known that anyone that steals, commits manslaughter, adultery and other little crimes are mostly put to
death
 immediately in countries like Iran, Arab and other Islamic countries. In conclusion, I feel that capital
punishment
 is cruel and should no longer be allowed into law most especially for countries like Iran where gross
punishment
 is rampant.
In addition
, I
also
 think that since we didn't create people's lives we,
therefore
, have no right to take their lives with or without the law.
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