Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programme (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Mandatory social services
is
part of Change the verb form
are
the
secondary education in some countries. Many parents opine they are valuable experience to their adolescents, whereas antagonists feel that they could be a waste of time. From my point of view, Participating in communal activities are beneficial to youngsters' personal growth but they should be voluntary to give students more flexibility.
On one hand, compulsory involvement in unpaid social service may affect our pupils' study. Remove the article
apply
As
Our students are already pre-occupied by a hectic learning schedule, they may end up being overwhelmed by these Verify preposition usage
apply
extra curricular
activities. Correct your spelling
extracurricular
For instance
, giving regular sports classes to younger kids requires weekly commitment even if our student tutors need more time to prepare for school. This
may lead to less effort on
studying and ultimately affect their academic performance. Verify preposition usage
in
into
Therefore
, students should get to follow their own will and decide whether they could handle their studies as well as extra social commitments.
On the other hand
, joining charity and neighbourhood events could boalster
the social development of our younger generations. Not only do they could expand their social network and meet people from all walks of Correct your spelling
bolster
live
, but Replace the word
life
also
they could be encouraged to contribute wihtout
asking for return. Giving is an ideal virtue of a model citizen and our society need more caring people to help those in needs. Correct your spelling
without
For example
, love and care could be disseminated by visiting the elderly and chit chat with them. This
could bring them pleasure and less loneliness.
In conclusion, voluntary communal commitment is vital to our students' development as well as our neighborhood
. But the school should motivate students to take part voluntarily rather than forcing them.Change the spelling
neighbourhood
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite