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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness.

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The question that whether people spend most loveable moments of their
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 when they are young or real happiness can only be enjoyed in adulthood is debatable.
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, it
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 depends upon the personal experiences of every individual in making any of these phases of
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 more
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. Advocates of
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 that young age is the golden phase of
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, are correct up to some extent. One main reason for it is that youngsters live
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arefree
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 without being accountable for their acts. They do not worry about their futures and their mistakes are usually avoided because it is a period of learning and evolving for them.
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, they feel less stressed than, counterpart adults do and,
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, live a happier
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.
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, a factor of evilness and jealousy is absent among adolescents
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 a key to
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appier
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. If a person would spend his
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 without carrying hatred for anyone in heart, it is more likely to lead a blissful
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.
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, some people think that
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 becomes more beautiful after reaching adulthood. People came out from the stage of immaturity. They took smart decisions that brought success and benefits to
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, and by doing so, a sense of satisfaction is
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uildup in their minds that lead to
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ore happy
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, people became more independent in their late twenties. They had a chance to go wherever they want and do whatever they love to.
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, in my opinion, it is the
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 story of a person that tells which phase of
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 was better than
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.
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, if I look back and think, I would never desire to go back. Even though
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 adult
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 involves more responsibilities, it
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 brings confidence in your judgments, in every area of
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. In conclusion, what is for sure is that every phase of
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 has its own charm; it is the circumstances that might make one precious than the other.
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