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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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A lot
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individuals believe that marketing can attract customers to
purchase
 a lot of merchandise which will not be of necessity to them at the moment. On the hand
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it can be said that the role of marketing is to
educates
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 people about any merchandise which can better our
day
 to
day
 living. I totally believe that marketing is very essential to us because it educates us about different goods and services, which can be of great value to our dealings. As believed by many scholars that marketing can motivate people to
purchase
 items which might not be used at the moment. Marketing an attract people to look around and gain interest in purchasing several different products. I do not agree
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this
 idea because you can choose not to
purchase
 the product if you do not want to.
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I went to my cellphone provider to change my cellphone plan and they told me about a promotion they were running for a new mobile phone. I did not
purchase
 the mobile phone because I did not need it.
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marketing can educate us about the different services and
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good
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 available in the market. Sometimes we can only get to know about something once
its
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 marketed to us very well.
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I cannot go and
purchase
 a new microwave unless I gain knowledge about how it functions and the pecks of having one. So I totally agree that Marketing plays a very vital role in enhancing our
day
 to
day
 livelihood, Because in order for us to
purchase
 something we need to know about that service before we acquire it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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