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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes? Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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Due to globalization, many people now appreciate wearing stylish outfits. Modern fashion has taken over society which is why people like to look good. In my opinion, I will agree with
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confidence
 courage and respect. It is agreed that most people have
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assion to ensemble up in gorgeous outfits. Smart and beautiful attire can boost self-
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, an individual feels positive among families, friends, and colleagues, if they look smart. Most people lack
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onfidence to address people especially if they are not well dressed, the aura for approaching others will be
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ow while, people who are gorgeously dressed will like to show off their look and pass a message to people with courage. A final year project of a sociology student, in
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niversity of Lagos, proves that 70% of people have more poise when they wear fashionable clothes. A lot of people are believed to appreciate being well dressed. I believe society judges people by their outfits. When people wear a nice costume, they respect them and assume he or she belongs to a good family. Respect is earned in
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 part of the world by stylish clothing.
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, when attending a function in Lagos, you have to be fashionably dressed if not you might not gain entrance into the event venue. In conclusion, wearing a valuable outfit is in vogue now. I agree to these because fashionable attire improve individual
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confidence
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, brings about respect from people towards the individual and family.
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