In some countries, celebrities complain about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as a part of their fame. Do you agree or disagree?

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uman right to have privacy, one can decide what

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she wants to share with others.

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of a person should be known to everyone, so they don't put risk on

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ives of other citizens

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ery same person is a known criminal. But I do agree on

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art where many media publications trying to make regular life of celebrities hard, because they may forcefully obtain any private

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and even spread

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about them, just to get views and public attention. We will see some more detailed

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explanation

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pcoming paragraphs. A job of news production organization is to spread useful and correct

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to masses, even if provided truth is bitter. But now these days they are becoming more greedy and biased to attract particular kinds of

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iewer for their regular news media reporting. Let's say a football player did not score well in finals of a championship match, and after

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event general public of

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entire nation wants to know why

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a good player lost

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eally important match in

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irst place. Media reporting folks will instantly chase that player for

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rief amount of time asking for reasons and spreading

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about why he might have lost the match, so people can constantly keep looking that particular

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in current interest, and reading

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viewership rates

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high on that news.

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of cheering

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and afford put by players, mass media people choose

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way of shaming and even use any private

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personal

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to make matters worst for them. One more example I can give in

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ecent set of events happening in India,

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uicide of

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bollywood

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actor Sushant Singh Rajput. In

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case

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investigation

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is still going on by CBI and primary suspect is his former

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Riya Chakraborty who is

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actress herself. All news reporting channels on television are daily providing

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case by any means.

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chasing that woman, pushing her physically while in public spaces to make microphone reach near her mouth, in order to capture any words spoken by her. Even there is no official outcome of

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and court ruling she is

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with many names and tagged as a serial killer. And

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orst part is that all TV reporters

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outside of her house and even peak through

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indow to see what she is doing, which is

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ross violation of day to day privacy needs. On the other side

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I do agree because of constant news reporting from media's

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going on. And

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of that was public outrage on Maharastra state government being

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roceeding by closing case as suicide without proper evidence. That's why we are currently having serious crime

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going on from central government to serve proper

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eceased actor. To conclude

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what I desire is basically all news media organisations should understand their soul responsibility of providing correct

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ublic. Not to spread misinformation and private

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in wrong

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useless context to gather attention from public interest. And that's why many countries and celebrities complain about

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as well. No one should become a judge outside of court and ruin

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ersonal lives of others by violating privacy.

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