n many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Nowadays, people commonly use gadgets,

such

as mobile phones, for

payment

of national as well as international transactions via different applications. It has made the lives much easier than ever before.

However

, there are

also

some drawbacks that used

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e kept in mind while using online apps for

payment

. On the one hand, the advancement in technology for online transactions has surely saved

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time and energy. As

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life is too busy, people are very exhausted and they do not have time to stand in a long queue to pay their utility bills.

Also

, international payments could occur within a few seconds after the transaction is being processed, avoiding the complicated system of making pay order or bank cheque, as counterparts, in the past do.

Moreover

, you can pay at any hour of the day; there is no specific time period for paying through mobile apps. So, it is

also

an additional benefit over offline

payment

system.

On the other hand

although

online

payment

has a high success rate, it

also

involves risk,

for instance

, people are more likely to get trapped in fraudulent acts because of many fake applications made in play store to attract pupils, and it is very difficult to know the authenticity and reliability of an app. According to an article published in Times magazine, the ratio of stealing money from customers by internet shopping is increasing day by day.

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satisfactory stuff, and sometimes the equipment even does not work properly. In conclusion, what is for sure is that

this

technology has inevitably added comfort to the lives of people, as a whole; regardless of the possibilities of being cheated.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

290 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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n many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

in many countries, the level of crime is increasing. why do you think is and what can be done about it?

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