Violence in the media promotes violence in the society To what extent do you agree ?

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Since childhood we have been emulating what we see, as
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we emulated our parent, and as we grew up, we relied
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inspiration from various other sources
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as media.
Violence
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in media does have some detrimental effect on the
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and I do agree that to some extent it
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promotes
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in the
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violence
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is horrifying, but if viewed regularly, our mind starts to adapt to it and considers it as a new normal.
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, people who want to vent
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their frustration, turn to what that have seen in media, not only that, even pick up ideas and inspirations from it.
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, many extremely violent and unspeakable actions are performed on the dark web, in lieu to satisfy the hunger of the people, for whom
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efinition of
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has already reached the
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level. So the more we expose
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to
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, the more they will get used to it and classify savagery as normal day to day acts. In previous centuries, most of the crimes had a more gruesome punishment, but as we have evolved into a more accepting
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, we have been lenient about
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acts allowing the person to improve.
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various online and TV
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which is available to even teenagers, shows drug cartels and murderers getting away without strict punishment, some might be lured
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limelight along with satisfaction displayed from these violent crimes. So, if the censorship of
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violent
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isn't more stringent,
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ounger generation in their moulding years might get inspired by the wrong
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. In conclusion, I do agree to some extent that
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in media promotes the same in the
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, but we can control it by limiting the amount and severity of the
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and making the
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ounger audience.
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