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Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? What could the government do to reduce this problem?

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In modern society, there are huge problems as long as the technology has improved. Among those issues, one of the most serious ones is the traffic congestion that we need to consider to solve it. I will examine some causes of
this
 concern and give some ideas to reduce
this
 matter.
Firstly
, one of the reasons is that many citizens possess their own vehicles. These days, most people have their cars and businessman
in particular
 because they can go on a trip which means they can easy to access everywhere
moreover
 they do not necessarily take the seat which is surrounded by people who are taking on the phone loudly or yelling at someone.
Secondly
, another cause is that it seems like many people do not recognize
this
 problem for the reason that the consumption of vehicles has gradually increased. In accordance with E college, the amount of car in the world was ascended double than the number of cars
last
 year. When it comes to solution of it,
first
 of all, the ministry should hearten people to use transportation by giving them benefits
such
 as they decline the price of the fee of transports or build a better bus system or make more bus route so that citizens who live in
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ural area can take transports. To add more than, politics should educate people by affording them a program which is contained how to deal with our traffic congestion. In conclusion, the ministry should concentrate on using transports than their own vehicles
additionally
, the state and citizens need to cooperate to make use of reducing traffic jam.
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