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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
Nowadays, it is observed, some students join
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ollege in the same
year
 they complete their high school studies, while some prefer taking a
year
 gap.
Therefore
, choosing not to go for the higher studies immediately have
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 own benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, after completing alma mater, students have
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lethora of options under which they want to join the universities.
Furthermore
, different exams are held by many top-ranked colleges to take admission, for which preparation is required.
Hence
, teenagers prefer dropping twelve months to
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 and get into the institute they wish to join.
In addition
,
this
 break helps them to overcome the mental pressure and take the decision wisely.
For example
, exams like IIT and AIEEE to get in top-most engineering colleges in India.
On the other hand
, if an individual is capable to manage time and prepare self for
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future challenges while finishing their school studies, they might save a
year
 for themselves.
That is
, if a student does not take a
year
 off, he might save a
year
 and be ahead of other students. For an instance, if a child wants to take admission in an engineering college and focus on to prepare for the competitive exams simultaneously with school studies
then
 a
year
 is saved and is already ahead of the children who are planning for a
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. In conclusion, it is important that children should maintain
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 mental balance and go for
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better options. A break to figure self-choice should be a priority.
Thus
, a happy mind mitigates humungous idea and help to build a better lifestyle.
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