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Languages are dying out all the time. The Result of this is a world with fewer languages. This is a good thing for people everywhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At present, there are about thousands of languages that are practised by the people across the globe.
However
, in
this
 modern era, many native languages are no longer in existence and are dying out all the time. The consequence of
this
 is that there are fewer languages now. Some people opine that
this
 is beneficial for everyone around the world. I,
however
, have contradicting notion. To commence with, languages are an integral part of our lives as they are
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dentity of a particular section of society and depicts their cultures and traditions. So, if these languages for me to cease its existence,
then
 the people would lose a significant piece of their life.
This
 would result in learning a new
language
 from the very start. Taking
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xample of tribal and indigenous people from Canada who spoke a distinct dialect and were forced to learn another
language
. The end result of
this
 was that these people lagged behind from their society and faced tons of difficulties. Some people,
on the other hand
, believe that lesser the languages, more it is better for the population at a global level. It is assumed that if there is a universal
language
that is
 followed by everyone,
then
 it would be a
lot
 easier to connect with people from any nation and form relationships.
Furthermore
, a
lot
 of money is spent on translation every year, so if the
language
 barrier is ended,
then
 it would save a
lot
 of money. To conclude, there is no denying of the fact that languages are spoken, it will bring a
lot
 of benefits but taking a part of someone's identity is
also
 not wise.
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