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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this ? How can this problem be solved?

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Many
city
 centres around the world have
overpopulation
 as a major drawback.
This
 essay will discuss the major causes of
overpopulation
 in
city
 centres which include the need for a better standard of living and exposure to the
city
's way of
life
.
This
 essay will
also
 suggest solutions to these problems. A better standard of living can
further
 be explained to me an opportunity to a white-collar job with a good income which will enable the citizens to afford the kind of
life
 and accommodation they long for without hassle.
In addition
, the need for exposure to
city
life
 by people living in suburban areas is another major challenge to
overpopulation
. The way of
life
 in urban areas is usually different from suburban areas due to modern
life
.
For example
, when a new product is introduced, it reaches the big cities before it gets to the rural area. People living in urban centres are better informed. There are several solutions to
overpopulation
 in urban centres,
however
, two major solutions will be highlighted.
Firstly
; the need to provide job securities in the rural areas by moving industries and factories to the area.
This
 will create employment as well as increase a better standard of living.
Secondly
, the need to replicate the
city
 way of
life
 in rural areas. Any new information or product should be communicated at the same time to both areas.
This
 will discourage migration because they will not view themselves as lacking in anything new. In conclusion, to mitigate the
overpopulation
 of the
city
 centre, there is a need to move industries and factories as well as replicate the structures in urban centres to suburban centres.
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