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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this ? How can this problem be solved?

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Many
city
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 centres around the world have
overpopulation
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 as a major drawback.
This
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 essay will discuss the major causes of
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 in
city
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 centres which include the need for a better standard of living and exposure to the
city
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's way of
life
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.
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 essay will
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 suggest solutions to these problems. A better standard of living can
further
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 be explained to me an opportunity to a white-collar job with a good income which will enable the citizens to afford the kind of
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 and accommodation they long for without hassle.
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, the need for exposure to
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life
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 by people living in suburban areas is another major challenge to
overpopulation
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. The way of
life
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 in urban areas is usually different from suburban areas due to modern
life
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.
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, when a new product is introduced, it reaches the big cities before it gets to the rural area. People living in urban centres are better informed. There are several solutions to
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 in urban centres,
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, two major solutions will be highlighted.
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; the need to provide job securities in the rural areas by moving industries and factories to the area.
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 will create employment as well as increase a better standard of living.
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, the need to replicate the
city
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 way of
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 in rural areas. Any new information or product should be communicated at the same time to both areas.
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 will discourage migration because they will not view themselves as lacking in anything new. In conclusion, to mitigate the
overpopulation
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 of the
city
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 centre, there is a need to move industries and factories as well as replicate the structures in urban centres to suburban centres.
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