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The table illustrates the underground railway systems in six cities. Overall, underground railways inaugurated in London
first
 among all other cities and the length of tracks were largest in London too.
On the other hand
, in Tokyo, the underground railways opened later but carried
h
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ighest number of passengers per
year
. Categorically, among London, Paris, and Tokyo, the underground railway systems in the London were the oldest and it opened in 1863 with 394
kms
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km
 of tracks which were
also
 longest among three of them. In 1900, Paris started
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 underground trains and it had 199
kms
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km
 of tracks and
lastly
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Tokyo, with 155
kms
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km
 of rail lines opened in 1927
although
, 1927
million
 passengers travelled in that which were the highest and was almost 800
million
 more passengers than Paris.
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 of passengers were least in London with 775
million
 per
year
 only. Moving on to the other remaining cities, the underground rail services was the newest in Los Angeles and opened in 2001 with 28
kms
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km
 of tracks and carried 50
million
 passengers per
year
. In Kyoto, the number of passengers per
year
were
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 only 5
million
 less than Los Angeles and the tracks were shortest with only 11
kms
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km
. In Washington DC, the underground railways opened 25 years before than Los Angeles with 126
kms
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km
 of tracks and nearly thrice passengers than Los Angeles.
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