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The table illustrates the underground railway systems in six cities. Overall, underground railways inaugurated in London
first
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 among all other cities and the length of tracks were largest in London too.
On the other hand
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, in Tokyo, the underground railways opened later but carried
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ighest number of passengers per
year
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. Categorically, among London, Paris, and Tokyo, the underground railway systems in the London were the oldest and it opened in 1863 with 394
kms
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km
 of tracks which were
also
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 longest among three of them. In 1900, Paris started
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 underground trains and it had 199
kms
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km
 of tracks and
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Tokyo, with 155
kms
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km
 of rail lines opened in 1927
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, 1927
million
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 passengers travelled in that which were the highest and was almost 800
million
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 more passengers than Paris.
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 of passengers were least in London with 775
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 per
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 only. Moving on to the other remaining cities, the underground rail services was the newest in Los Angeles and opened in 2001 with 28
kms
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km
 of tracks and carried 50
million
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 passengers per
year
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. In Kyoto, the number of passengers per
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were
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 only 5
million
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 less than Los Angeles and the tracks were shortest with only 11
kms
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km
. In Washington DC, the underground railways opened 25 years before than Los Angeles with 126
kms
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km
 of tracks and nearly thrice passengers than Los Angeles.
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