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CHILDREN LEARN MORE BY OBSERVING THE BEHAVIOUR OF ADULTS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? GIVE YOUR OPINION WITH RELEVANT EXAMPLES.

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Since ages, parents have always been concerned about the behaviour of their kids. Some people say elders are only responsible for what all they learn whether it is good or bad.
This
 essay will discuss why I totally disagree with
this
 proposition because it is far too draconian. The learning process for children is never-ending. Some believe that older category of the family is the reason for all their actions as it all comes from looking at them. They claim that kids are always with their parents and their world is limited to them.
For example
, many studies have proven that learning starts from the mother’s womb. Because of
this
 study, some parents start improving their behaviour even before their child is born.
In other words
, these people believe that all the elders are role models for them.
Although
 learning starts from the womb, the idea of saying that children are the mirror to their adults is totally bizarre.
This
 theory is applicable only for toddlers, as their activities are limited to eating, playing and sleeping. But when they start growing, they watch cartoons, movies, play with other kids.
For instance
, according to a survey, many youngsters learn a lot from what they watch on television.
Thus
 adults are not the only source from where they learn.
This
 essay discussed why parents and adult family members are not responsible for all what they learn.
Thus
 it is totally unjustified for adults to be held accountable for the actions of their kids.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Imitation
  • Observational learning
  • Role model
  • Social learning theory
  • Behavioral influence
  • Skill acquisition
  • Cognition
  • Socialization
  • Critical thinking
  • Direct instruction
  • Cultural transmission
  • Media influence
  • Norms and values
  • Cognitive development
  • Guidance
  • Active participation
  • Behavioural patterns
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