Some people think government should spend money on sport facilities for training top athlets. Other think it is should be for everybody. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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I have nothing to say about
this
problem as I do not connect myself with a professional
sport
.
Nevertheless
, one of the possible solution to encourage an active lifestyle in society is to provide more fitness facilities. The
sport
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coaches believe that a government should spend public money in order to open sports centres for either training or preparing for the Olympic Games. Many people
also
think that If there had been any up to date equipment, the athletes would definitely win a price or take the
first
place. Of course,some projects and competitions require help from a state, but in our modern world
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there are many investors, who can assist with financial troubles.
For example
, many football clubs are fully receiving investments from private companies not from the state.
On the other hand
, there is a greater way to provide
sport
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facilities for every citizen in a country. I can understand that the government will not only solve the problem of the
ealth
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health
status of the entire population but
also
encourage young people to do the professional game as well.
For instance
, state budgets need to be spent on healthcare and opening of gyms is a good decision. From what has been discussed above here should be drawn a conclusion that there are many positive reasons to spend money on
sport
facilities for everyone as well it can lead to
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mprovement of public health.
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