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With the development of technology children are now living in a world that is completely different to what it was 50 years ago. What problems does this cause for society and the family?

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In
this
 modern era, the world is changing a lot as compared to the past.
This
 is only possible because of the
technology
 and with the help of it
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people are able to do their work easily. But
this
 development affects a lot on children. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view. Commencing with, most of today's children are
depend
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 on
the
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modern
technology
 and
this
 is very dangerous for their future.
Firstly
, 90 percentage
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kids
are spend
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 their most of time on
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omputer and video games. Due to
this
 reason
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they are suffering from eye and
health related
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 problems.
Secondly
, because of the mobile games
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they are not aware of the
out door
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 activities and its importance.
This
are
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 some demerits of modern development. So parents must have to keep an eye on their kids when they are using
this
 type
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ofelectronic
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of electronic
 devices.
Moreover
, recent
technology
 totally
canged
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changed
pupiles
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pupils
 mentality about the world. As per 2016 government report, fighting games are the main source of child
vilonce
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violence
 in society.
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, school
studends
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students
are prefer
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 to
figh
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fight
fish
 with
eachother
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each other
 after plying pubg game in mobile. As per oxford university
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research
, current
technology
 plays
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ajor role in
child related
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child-related
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 problems, Which we are facing in society. To conclude, modern things totally changed
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id's life than
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ew
last
 decades. So
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overnment and parents must have to encourage
this
 child for positive use for
this
 development. Because
this
 is beneficial for the society as well as for the country.
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