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Writing Samples
Band 6

Nowadays human activities have had negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem while others argue that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that in the new life, human activity
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 had negative effects on
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 and animal species,
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 it is a commonly held belief that, more and more
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 believe
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 too late to do anything about
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 issue, there is
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 an argument that effective measures can be taken to improve
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 situation. In
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 essay, I will analyse the topic from both views and consider my own opinion. On the one hand,
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 and animal places one of the biggest important things that should government protect,
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, every single country should put rules to protect animal places and
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,
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, there is no one will respect the species or
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 if there is no protection from the government.
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, it is never too late for anything
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 can start
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 any time,
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, there is a study published by New York University in 2018 concluded that 89 per cent of societies who try to protect animals places and
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 achieve in five years . Ultimately, every issue has multiple sides, and it is important to carefully consider both the advantages and disadvantages before reaching a final judgment. Different
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 may have different priorities depending on their background, values, or personal experiences.
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 a universally ideal solution may be difficult to achieve, making balanced, well-informed decisions based on critical thinking and long-term impact can help address key concerns in a fair, practical, and sustainable way. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
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 question. On balance, despite
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 having different opinions, I believe that everyone can start from today to help
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 and animals.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly present both sides of the argument in a more organized manner. Use separate paragraphs for each viewpoint.
task achievement
Enhance your examples with specific details and context to strengthen your arguments. This could include more data or real-world situations.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity and readability. Avoid run-on sentences and ensure subject-verb agreement.
task achievement
You successfully introduced the topic and indicated your intention to analyze both views, which sets a clear direction for your essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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