These days many people leave their country to work abroad and take their family with them. Do you think benefits of this outweigh disadvantages in terms of family development?

Nowadays migration has become common practice by many families.
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there are many benefits to shift to different countries for the purpose of work, the ramification should not be neglected.
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indeed the benefits are more superior. There are
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advantages of working abroad.
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the job opportunities are more and with high pay and with other family benefits.
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my brother and their family recently shifted to Australia, and he is
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double the amount he
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to get in India.
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it will be good for children as they get to meet people from different
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cultural
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, as Australia has is a hub for
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migration
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children from different countries and they learn to respect people from different backgrounds. Clearly,it is a good
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decision
by families to relocate to different countries.
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there are some drawbacks associated
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trend. When people shift to
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they are not only going away from their
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but
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from the extended family members. Children get separated from their grandparents.
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children get disconnected to their own culture.
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, children of many Indian families residing abroad can hardly speak their native language. Overall these cons are quite insignificant and can be ignored. In conclusion
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even though there are some disadvantages to working abroad,it is eclipsed by the advantages. In my opinion
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it is better to move to a country where the future of its family is bright.
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