There was a time when people only shopped out of necessity, but these days shopping seems to have become a new form of leisure activity. People don't appreciate the value of money anymore. To what extent do you agree with this view?
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has become a trend among people. Everybody wants to do
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shopping just for fun
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of their basic needs. Pupils wasted their money on
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unnecessary things and spendings lots of money regardless of their value. I completely agree with the view that people wasted their free time
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doing shopping.
To begin
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with,
the
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people are
more free
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freer
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as compare to older times due to the lack of job
opputunities
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. Companies are seeking
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Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
In our modern world, the rich are getting richer and the poor are becoming poorer. Therefore, it is suggested by some people that the gap between classes of our society should be eliminated as it can bring contentment to every family. Analysing I completely agree with this notion because if there will be small differences between the richest and poorest members, it can bring equal opportunities to all and harmony in the community.
Global environmental changes are unquestionably the most prevalent and worrying issues in any society, and their prevention should be taken seriously. Despite a few problems, such as plastic production and the absence of recycling, I reckon that the decision of the raising prices for fuel is definitely the best way to prevent the worldwide catastrophe.
A number of individuals urgh governments to invest money for life searching outside the earth, others thought this is a waste of investment, while there are a vast number of problems on our home planets. In my opinion, I consider that searching for a new life outside our planet can help humans understand how our life is formed which benefits biological studies.
In contemporary society, many youngsters prefer to spend most of the day on their electronic gadgets. The reasons behind this phenomenon are mainly because of the cutting-edge technology of this century which carries diverse outcomes; both beneficial and harmful ones.
I am John Scot and I am currently living in "Locky Hill" next to the "Barlie Road". I am writing to request your urgent action for congested traffic due to this road's improper construction.