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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

#country #study
Every
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one
 wants to live at his
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her home comfort zone. On completion of school
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many students opted for higher studies from foreign universities. For the reason
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they may leave their country or
otherwise
 to achieve desired career growth many people decided to leave their countries. In my opinion
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there are various pro and cons of leaving
one
’s native place.
Firstly
, I would like to discuss the positive aspects of leaving a native state to settle down in some other unknown country. It provides a chance to the immigrants to know and learn about the different culture and customs of
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oreign nation other than his
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her own place. In
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tart, it will take some time to adjust into the unfamiliar conditions but after spending some time individual will have accustomed with these circumstances and became used to them and sooner or later they started enjoying it. Whereas,
on the other hand
, professional development took place as he
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she
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 a chance to work
in
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ifferently cultured and multi-lingual atmosphere which is
one
 of the major requirements of globalization in the present competitive world.
However
, if we consider the darker side of migration to
other country
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then
one
 needs to be far away from his
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her family, friends, relatives etc definitely, they are going to miss their close and loving
one
. On
this
 occasion
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it reminds me
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one
 old saying that “native home-made bread is far better and tastier than foreigners flavoured dishes”. In my considered opinion
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it’s the choice of the individual to decide whether he
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she wants to settle abroad on the cost of physical distances from his
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her nearer or dearer or compromise with their dreams. The choice vested in the hands of individuals only.
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