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The only way to solve increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

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In
this
 contemplate era, Increase in crime rate has become a crucial problem. A few people consider the only way to tackle
such
 a problem is to teach parents about efficient parenting techniques. Bein completely agree with
this
, will discuss the reasoning in the essay below. To start with, As it is very important to teach children about moral values at a very early stage of their lives which is quite impossible without the proper guidance of their parents. But nowadays, both the parents are working so that children get no reference about what is right and wrong for them which eventually attract them towards wrong acts rather than the right ones.
For example
, recent research published in times of India states that the children who spend some time with family get less involved in the criminal activities rather than the one who does not get any support or guidance from any of their parents.
However
, it is important for both parents to work to give their
child
 a sedentary lifestyle, still, some time should be given to them for their overall growth.
In addition
, parents need to control their mind or anger in front of their children. As sometimes they punish their
child
 in a harsh way which highly affects a
child
's behaviour because by punishing them physically make them believe that they can harm anybody once they are grown up and
this
 type of mentality can harm them. Rather than punishing them physically or mentally they should be taught with love, affection and care and should be listened properly and they should equally know about the expectations of their parents.
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hild will be taken care with love it will make them comfortable in front of their parents and somehow they make any mistake they would not hide them and by discussing with parents they will get an appropriate solution of their problem rather than misleading that mistake. In conclusion, it is very important to take some time off to teach children about moral values and benefits of hard work, love, affection and care and it is only possible with the guidance of parents at
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irst level because learning starts at home so, it is equally important for parents to be perfect if they want their children to be like them.
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