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Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I tend to confess that many people think that modern artists earn multiple sums of payment for the things they do. Other people think that many talented people still struggling to survive. Many people not getting a good platform prove them or more opportunities to show talent. The following essay will outline the reasons why few artists earning more
money
 and others struggling for survival. Perhaps, the main reason is some people may get an appropriate platform to show their talent.
Moreover
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they can get help from the parents and relatives to get the proper opportunity. Nowadays getting an opportunity is not that much easy because there is a huge competition in
this
industry
also
 impacting due to favouritism. But If you get a chance, you must prove yourself
otherwise
 it is very difficult to get another chance. The best example is the movie
industry
 and pop music. if you sing a song and it is successful, they will get more new chances. On the other side,of the movie or song is successful, many famous companies will ask them to promote their product. So they will earn
money
 from their
industry
 and even from the promotions. For everyone
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initial success is more essential. Once you get success, they need to choose suitable opportunities
otherwise
 they will lose the stardom. Once you they get the stardom, they earn the
money
 automatically. On the flip side
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many people are struggling to get the chances and sometimes if they get the opportunity, they are not using in the right way to build their career. For the artist's stardom matters to earn the
money
. Some people do not patience to wait till to get the right chance. They were choosing the wrong path to get opportunities. In
this
 case,many people decept by the people. The government need to help artists by giving some guidelines to the production. They need to decide the minimum daily wage for the artists. In my opinion, a modern artist who is successful in
this
industry
 will receive more pay for their work. These successful people will get work continuously. But other people are struggling to work and salary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income disparity
  • struggling artists
  • market demand
  • public preference
  • government support
  • grants
  • funding
  • exhibitions
  • cultural wealth
  • societal benefits
  • market dynamics
  • government intervention
  • art market
  • public taste
  • private investment
  • balanced artistic community
  • financial assistance
  • creative industry
  • artistic merit
  • economic sustainability
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