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In the future, more people will choose to go on a holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday Do you agree or disagree?

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Its speculated that more people will rather go for a vacation in one’s own
country
 rather than a foreign
country
.
This
 essay agrees that people will prefer to go on
a
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holiday in their own
country
 in the future. Keeping the revenue in house and being able to appreciate the beauty of our own
country
 are some
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the reasons behind it. When we travel outside, we are paying a lot for our travel, hotel, cab fare and sightseeing, all the money from which is going to a foreign land.
Instead
, if we choose to holiday within our own
country
,
this
 money stays in our
country
 and that can help our nation grow.
This
 will
also
 enable and encourage the government to build more attractions and preserve the existing ones if there are more people visiting them. One
such
 example is the Lotus Temple in New Delhi which has been beautified even
further
 and made more accessible to people. There are a lot of interesting places within one's own
country
 which one can explore while on vacation. Everyone should take out the time to visit these places and appreciate these
first
 rather than
marveling
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 at attractions from another
country
. One
such
 example is the beaches in Andaman and Nicobar Islands which are no less in comparison than any other International beach. In conclusion, most people should prefer going on a vacation in their own
country
 and avoid travelling abroad on a holiday. Explore our
country
 to appreciate its beauty
first
 while
also
 keeping the revenue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
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