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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Parents play an essential role in the
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 of children.It is said by some individuals that young children should be taught about the crucial qualities of parenthood.In my perspective ,it is
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ppreciable step to teach children about the skills which are required to become
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 issue will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with,if young children can be taught about some of the basic qualities of how to become a good
parent
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 there are chances that they will become more happy parents in future and there will be less probability of conflict among them in future.
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arly stage of their
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 better to teach them in the initial stage of
life
.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by Karl Marks in all the developed and developing countries,and it had concluded that many people were interviewed and they were in favour of teaching some of the right qualities of parenthood.
Furthermore
, qualities like cooperation,patience,honesty,
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hard work
 and kindness are really essential in order to become a happy
parent
. One of the most important
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 in order to become
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uccessful
parent
 is stress management when they are in
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 state of anger because children learn some of the skills from the home environment.
For instance
,if any mishappening happens in a family,and parents get panic and they
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contol
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control
 over their emotions and become unable to hospitalize that member,
then
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 can make their
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 worse,so
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eally important skill,and children should be taught about
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 skill. To recapitulate, I would like to write that children must be taught about some of the skills of parenthood which can play
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ital role in order to make them cheerful in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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