According to a recent study, the more time people use the internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world wide, we should be concerned about the effects this having on social interactions. To what extent do you agree with this?

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The
internet
has revolutionised the way we communicate. Now everyone is connected to everyone else in a simpler, more accessible and more immediate way. The use of the
internet
and social media has skyrocketed over the past decades. The
internet
,
however
, has
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oosening of social ties due to the limitation on
time
spent on close relations and underdevelopment of
communication
skills.
First
and foremost people,
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specially
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ounger generation, spend hours of their
time
online, chatting and on forums, investing less energy on their immediate present. We need to spend hours in conversation regarding likes, dislikes, history, family dynamics dreams and fears in order to create and maintain a healthy relationship.
Additionally
, fostering online relationships can hurt our offline. It is,
therefore
, impossible to build or enhance a relationship when
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social media is in the
first
place, taking our
time
and attention away from who is in front of us.
Furthermore
, unlimited use of
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nternet makes us less able to communicate.
In other words
, the
time
people are spending texting and online
communication
means that they are missing out on developing critical social skills. They are not learning how to read body language, facial expressions and vocal reflections, which are considered as non-verbal
communication
. These are the key to
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rich
communication
. When these skills are not properly developed they may even not be able to formulate a response in
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time
when interacting with people. To sum up, the
internet
makes it possible for an unlimited number of people to communicate with one another freely and quickly in an open way.
However
, it is certainly true that unlimited expenditure of their
time
online jeopardises offline relationships
firstly
due to the limited
time
allocated for face-to-face
communication
and
also
poorly developed
communication
skills.
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